Sunlight
of the winter
The hopeless is vanishing and the
bright light is coming. While I was writing my diary, the wind cold blew my
face it is good. I never leave this city even though objects my desire.
Philadelphia has been continued too change in the better way. I think everyone
will breathe clearly in the fresh air again. I noticed some one began open the
door and window to find the refreshment in the morning. Some people who
detained themselves in house come out for walking in the street. The business
began to run. For example, the shop show the sing to open, and ship sailed to
sell the food to hungry city .Even the government is preparing to announce that
stagecoach con be service in early November. Many doctor predicted that the epidemic
will cease when the winter return.
My neighbors just came back from
Maryland. He and his family left the city since he known that someone die in
August. We talk to each other for a while and told me that he is confident the
fever will end because he agreed with Dr. Rus. He follows any information about
Dr.Rush’s cure. He is so great to come back to his home. In this moment, I feel
seem like I am getting a new life it beyond happiness. Meanwhile, I felt
absolutely sad because I could not save my family until this time. This is a
numerous defeat in my life.
Many people died because of the
yellow fever epidemic. It is hard to exactly know that how many people died in
during time had the fever. Because, the officer of government who had
responsibility to record they fled the city and someone had sickness. In my
opinion, I thought that more than thousand took spirits to the fever. I hope
the situation will get to normal recently.
1.This journal is the part of darkness became sunlight, people retune to the city and their life is better soon. I like the first paragraph because it good conveys the emotion and feeling. I use a lot of new vocabulary and my sentences are easy to understand.
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For example
Before I had never study with you I just knew that what for example mean, but I don’t know exactly how the way to use that word. When you use for example, it comes with two sentences and example develop your idea. Using for example always comes with comma.
While I was writing my diary, the wind cold blew my face it is good.
I have learned seven sentence patterns. This is one of the patterns that are front shifter and trunk. I had never known to call that and how to use it.
Meanwhile, I felt absolutely sad because I could not save my family until this time.
I learned the new vocabulary that meanwhile. It means that at the same time and it is a linker. The linker is the word to relate with the sentence.
3.The weather today is dark like my life and I feel weak more than every day. The disease reduced my strength but I will never give up. I try to encourage myself every night.
It comes from journal entry for Saturday September, 14
The hopeless is vanishing and the bright light is coming. While I was writing my diary, the wind cold blew my face it is good. I never leave this city even though objects my desire. Philadelphia has been continued too change in the better way.
It comes from my the best journal
-One thing I can see obviously is the attraction for reading. There are many expressions that can imagine what happened in this story.
-Grammar is stronger than journal entry for Saturday September, 14