Lina Shkilko
March 12, 2013
Essay #1, Draft #1
What Can You Expect If YOU Have Chickenpox
Once, in the end of spring, a long time ago, I had unpleasant experience. I was only 10 years old, but I remember everything how it happened. The first of all I started to scratch all my body, all time, and my behavior was noisier than usual. My parents were worry about me and called a doctor. When the doctor came he made a diagnosis that was very common for that time, in my neighborhood, Chickenpox.
He explained that chickenpox is an infection, contagious, unpleasant disease, and explained me, “What I have to expect”.
The worst part was that whole experience, my body was itching. I saw red pimples, which covered my skin and asking me all time to scratch them. I had to be patient and couldn’t touch them, to prevent scars appearance on the pimples place. Sometimes I had a high temperature and felt myself weak and thirsty. All these symptoms together made me mad.
The main treatment of this terrible diseases was everyday process to put special awful green liquid, with called ‘’Brilliant green’’. I looked as a frog, all my pimples, were covered by that liquid and burn. I couldn’t appear anywhere. I was gloomy and sad. My mother did this procedure every evening, before I went to sleep. Furthermore, I had no appetite, sometimes experienced a fever. Majority of the time, as, I noticed, I was in a bad mood and felt weakness.
My doctor strictly gave me recommendation to stay in bed for 3 weeks, take antibiotics and drank a lot of tea and water. I had to take a rest and covered all pimples by brilliant green liquid. My parents had a lot of work with taking me all medicine, feeding me and made a huge quantity of tea and different liquids.
Fortunately, all pimples went away during 3 weeks and I step by step started my recovery. I felt tired couple month after that. Luckily, people can have chickenpox only ones, because, if you had that nightmare once, you will have immunity to this diseases for whole your life.
Hi Lina,
ReplyDeleteThis sounds so awful, but I have to admit that I laughed out loud when you described yourself as a frog. What a sad and funny image! I wonder what kind of medicine was in that "brilliant green"?
I also like how you described how much work this illness was for your parents. Reading this, I feel grateful that children get chickenpox vaccines these days, so I never have to go through this with my son!
One thing I wanted to mention was that instead of "I looked as a frog" we would say "I looked like a frog." We use "like" for this kind of direct comparison. We would use "as" in a different kind of structure with an adjective, such as "I was as green as a frog." Do you see the difference?
Excellent start!