Iliana Britos
April 2, 2013
Essay #2
“The Evolution of Education Thanks to the
Internet”
Have you ever thought how our lives could be
without technology? It’s seems that it didn’t stop and it’s only get increasing
every day. The advances in every area of technology are huge from one year to
another. It’s an enormous help in education, investigation and researches among
many other applications. Bring it all kind of information just with a click on
the mouse of the computer.
When I was at school, I used to spend long
hours in the library. They used to have big encyclopedias with all type of
information. I studied each subject from real books. Sometime we needed to look
at more than one book to find out what we need to know. It was normal to take
books from the library for a couple of days to study. We also used to take
books just to have something to read.
Today the education goes together with the
technology. Teachers use smart-boards at classrooms. Students read books in
tablets or even in cell phones. Part of the homework is complete on-line. The communication
between teachers and parents is, in most cases, through e-mail. Most, if not
all school have their own website where we can access all kind of information,
from the homework for the next day to events to come.
The public library has also change thanks to
the technology. All branches have access to computers and internet to use for
their customers. We can search for books, DVD’s and all material available at
the library through internet. People can make reservation of the material they
need in the website and get a notification when is ready to pick up. The library
sends a notification when is almost the due date to make the devolution and the
person can do the renovations in the internet.
The progress in technology is a great change
in everyday life. The scopes are tremendous and don’t look like it’s going to
stop any time soon. We can access all kind of information from our home in a
very short time with internet. Our children spend less time searching for
specific topics and more time studying. We
have access to almost everything with just a click.
Hi Iliana,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great start! I really love your first body paragraph. In fact, I like it so much that I want you to get rid of your original introduction and make it your new introduction. Please add a few more details about how time-consuming this research process was, and then add a "main idea" sentence clarifying that this essay is about how technology has helped your daughter's education.
You can also get rid of the paragraph about public libraries -- it seems to go off-topic. Instead, write a VERY detailed description about a research project that your daughter used technology on. Then, write a paragraph beginning, "In contrast, if I'd had to do this project as a child, I would have had to..." The grammar (third conditional) will be tricky, but I will help you with it! It will mainly be "I + would have + had to + base form of verb." Good luck! And keep your excellent conclusion.