Nataliya Stefanyshyn
04/09/2013
Essay #2, draft #1
Technology in Our Education
Technology today has made a huge
impact on our lives and our education by increasing the speed of learning and
by making the style of learning much better.
For me, technology made me see and realize bigger opportunities in life.
For example, a computer with internet access basically has all the information
you will need and it is one of the fastest ways to find research on any given
topic. Also, it can really help me understand and answer any questions I have
about a certain topic. Computers can also be used for entertainment and they
can be educational at the same time. I believe that computers are very useful
and are used in everyday life.
Another example of how technology has benefited my life would
be the use of smartphones. Smartphones have helped me stay more organized and
remember things better. They helped me always stay in touch which is important
because you can call anywhere you like and it helps you communicate faster.
Finally, my last example
would be my TV. Every evening I turn on the news. It helps me keep in touch
with what is happening around the world and it keeps me educated. On my TV I
can watch educational movies and documentaries that might help me with my
education as well as computers. For some people it is easier to visually see
things and that helps them understand it a little more deeply. For me,
documentaries help me see how things really are instead of just reading from
books.
However, technology has a few
disadvantages. The major disadvantage of
technology is that the more advance and better the technology becomes, the more
people start to depend to get all their information and researches from the computer.
People have started to overused technology and have used it as sole source of learning.
This caused that many people have had terrible handwriting; also people have lost
mentally and physically interacting. In modern life we have loss of communication
and socialization skills between students and teacher as well as between
students. It happens more often that students can talk to someone around the
world by texting or messaging, but not be able to get conversation with a
student sitting next to him in classroom. Technology has definitely changed
traditional methods of leaning, but cannot replace human factor in our
education.
Hi Nataliya,
ReplyDeleteYou have many interesting thoughts about the role of technology in our lives today. I think that, in this case, there are too many ideas for one short essay, and, as a result, there isn't enough development of any single idea. I was most interested in the ideas that you present in your first paragraph, and I was expecting your whole essay to be about how you have used computers to enhance your education, but then the rest of the essay was about other topics! Could you rewrite this essay so that it was only about what is in the first paragraph? And remember to use one of the strategies for writing introductions that we talked about in class. "I believe that computers are very useful and are used in everyday life" is too broad to be your main idea -- let's work on sharpening that a little bit.