Fernando Gonzalez
April 1, 2013
Essay #2 Draft #1 Bridge
Class
MY LIFE IS EASY WITH APPS
Technology has been part of my life since i became teenager and i started to learn how to use a computer and get conected to the internet. My life has became so much easy with the beautiful technology through the time and right now i feel like is fundamental in my life to achieve my important proyects and be conected every day with the people i love.
In many ways technology has helped a lot of people all over the world to improve their economy and get conected with society from different countries in many different languages. Nowdays there are some important ways to get conected with people, like twitter, facebook or by email. Society has become addicted to this sosial networks and are very important to them to achieve their business or just get conected with family or friends.
For me technology has affected my life so much for good, because has helped me to don't miss my family so much because i can get conected with them throught the social networks and this allow me to see them on skype or facetime. I want to confess that i am addicted to technology, sometimes i do everything to get the latest apple products, one of this was the latest iphone the released on november of last year, i was standing outside of the apple store at 4:30 am to get the iphone 5.
One of my favorite applications in my iphone is youtube, on this i can listen and watch the latest videos of my favorite music and also i like to watch some importants documentals of real life or just home videos of people from different countries, sometimes that help me for my education and sometimes give me some ideas of how to improve my life and be better every day as person. The videos i liked, i share it to my friends in the sosial networks to let them know what i like and maybe it can be helful for them to improve their knowledge.
I would say that im the kind of person who could not live without the technology we have on this days, because i think is very important for me, is so much easy to text or call a person and tell them what you need, or receive a picture or video and see how is the weather in other state and avoid to go there because could be dangerous. All this is things that technology allow me to do are very important in my life, it make it so much easy. The internet has became one of the greatest discoveries in the world.
Wow -- this is a great start! I am most interested in the line in body paragraph #3 that states, "That helps me with my education." I would recommend refocusing this entire paragraph so that it describes exactly how Youtube helps you with your education. Offer a specific story -- when? What video? How did it help you learn something more deeply? What images and sounds do you remember? How did these relate to the class reading or discussion? The more detailed you can make it, the better.
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